Another Newb

Eaglehaslanded · Post by **Eaglehaslanded** » Sun Jun 08, 2008 10:24 pm

Hello all etc.
OK, here are some of my first attempts at shipbuilding. I would really appreciate some criticism so I can improve.

Galaxia:
REMOVED for being bad
Argo:
REMOVED because I couldn't be arsed to colour it
Hood:
REMOVED see above

Helcraxë:

Nemesis II:

Wyre III:

For better or for worse?

That's all so far. Please tell me what you think of them.
Thanks

Lizzie · Post by **Lizzie** » Sun Jun 08, 2008 10:29 pm

Looks pretty good. Needs coloring.

Siber · Post by **Siber** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 2:03 am

Not bad at all. I agree with Lizzie, some adjustment to the colors would be a help. The Galaxia seems a bit messy, too. Might want to try to play with the depth of some of those pieces, maybe. I really like the Wyre.

DeathsHand · Post by **DeathsHand** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 2:07 am

All in all, pretty nice! However there seems to be something "off" with the Wyre and Argo's parenting lines.

1-behind Wyre's nano matrix
2-Near the Argo's rear beamer

Saint Jamez911 · Post by **Saint Jamez911** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 3:16 am

They look nice, but theres also alot of, how good i put it... Clutter i guess you could say, on the first ship. It looks... Over done. But by fare my fav is the Nemesis, its so cool. Its nice and even, not clutterd. It doesn't seem over powered at all. Over all good work

Neroman · Post by **Neroman** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 4:19 am

I like the nemesis and wyre. My own personal opinion, do a version with the Nemesis the other way with the narrow end in the front.

Saint Jamez911 · Post by **Saint Jamez911** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 4:27 am

Neroman wrote:I like the nemesis and wyre. My own personal opinion, do a version with the Nemesis the other way with the narrow end in the front.

Agreed

Eaglehaslanded · Post by **Eaglehaslanded** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 4:40 am

Thanks for all the feedback guys.
I will do a backwards facing version of the Nemesis and add come colour to that and the Wyre.

I'll also check the parenting that DeathsHand suggested, but I think it's just that I've put the weapons/modules in question in the exact centre of the sections involved, making it look confusing. So, I'll update the topicpost as I get that done (and probably with some more ships).

LordGarcia · Post by **LordGarcia** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 4:45 am

hey those already look quite nice! I like the look of the nemesis most.

Welcome to the community

Eaglehaslanded · Post by **Eaglehaslanded** » Mon Jun 16, 2008 8:03 pm

*reanimates thread*

I finally got back on the ship maker, and here's what I came up with.

Nemesis 2:

Wyre:

I'm not sure whether this just looks silly now

Sword:

An attempt at something blocky-ish

Helcraxë:

I really like this one.

So, did I get better, or does the colour just look stupid?

bien4500 · Post by **bien4500** » Mon Jun 16, 2008 8:32 pm

The Helcraxe is nice, coloring is OK, the Sword is ugly, take a look at mine or Lizzie's ships to get an idea of blockiness. And the Wyre looks silly, get rid of the triangular sections at the back, extend it, place a/an engine mount/s, make the neck thicker, and extend the front too. Make it pointy, with mandibles seen on Lizzie's old fleet.

Hege · Post by **Hege** » Mon Jun 16, 2008 9:00 pm

Not bad at all.
I like how you did the nemesis and hellcraxe.

Your coloring is rather good, though I think you could attempt to find a color theme that wouldnt be as over used as grey but thats just my opinion.

Eaglehaslanded · Post by **Eaglehaslanded** » Mon Jun 16, 2008 11:49 pm

Wyre II added to topicpost
(still needs front to be reshaped)

EDIT: Wyre III added to topicpost
Now I can get on with making something else

bien4500 · Post by **bien4500** » Tue Jun 17, 2008 5:57 am

The Wyre III is great, and did you get the Hood's name from mine?

Daxx · Post by **Daxx** » Tue Jun 17, 2008 7:25 am

bien4500 wrote:did you get the Hood's name from mine?

The Hood is a very famous RL ship, and appears in several SF series. I doubt people are ripping off your ideas specifically.