Another newb with ships
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Re: Another newb with ships
With the first ship the front looks kinda blocky, maybe you can add some more sections the the centre and make it a bit longer.
With the second ship... I think those side wings ruin it, they jut out at a weird angle to the ship
With the second ship... I think those side wings ruin it, they jut out at a weird angle to the ship
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Re: Another newb with ships
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Re: Another newb with ships
the first ship is nice, but i think you should add more armour to the front of the outrigger areas to make them more coherent with the rest of the ship.
the second one is better, but there's now too much clutter on the outline of those wing bits, and it would look more interesting if you broke up the very straight front sections
on the meta ship you need to give the hv missiles a tracking value, and you should post it in the meta ships test thread
the second one is better, but there's now too much clutter on the outline of those wing bits, and it would look more interesting if you broke up the very straight front sections
on the meta ship you need to give the hv missiles a tracking value, and you should post it in the meta ships test thread
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Re: Another newb with ships
The first ship is too blocky, as in it lacks any shape. It really needs some more pointy sections at the front, to lengthen it a bit and give it a more definable shape.
With the second ship... I really don't know why, but I simply don't like it. Maybe it's the wings, or how it's been shaded, or the colour scheme. I can't really explain it's problems correctly, so it's hard to explain how it could be improved. Sorry
With the second ship... I really don't know why, but I simply don't like it. Maybe it's the wings, or how it's been shaded, or the colour scheme. I can't really explain it's problems correctly, so it's hard to explain how it could be improved. Sorry
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Re: Another newb with ships
First ship isn't too bad, the engines are good, the main body is a bit oddly put together but isn't too cluttered. The white bits on the arms are good, but it seems to devolve into clutter with the gray pieces.
The second ship... not quite sure that it was an improvement over it's previous version. The centerline and rear is well done, but the straight outside lines on the front makes it look far too rigid in contrast to the various spherical sprites littered around. The antennae on the arms seem a bit overdone. Not quite liking the engine fins.
The second ship... not quite sure that it was an improvement over it's previous version. The centerline and rear is well done, but the straight outside lines on the front makes it look far too rigid in contrast to the various spherical sprites littered around. The antennae on the arms seem a bit overdone. Not quite liking the engine fins.
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Re: Another newb with ships
If I type an article I will keep showing my grammar mistake and lack of english.
Blue is great. Red is improvement.
p.s. :for shading,
viewtopic.php?f=22&t=4089&start=0
Blue is great. Red is improvement.
p.s. :for shading,
viewtopic.php?f=22&t=4089&start=0
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Re: Another newb with ships
Meh, let me comment on this, I disagree with most of the red parts.alive916 wrote:
Looks empty: add some doodads to the sensors/antennae.
Continue the slope: That'd just make it a Star Destroyer, and he's already doing that, just not the way you are illustrating in that image.
Maybe green it: Nah, don't, maybe a good idea to add a doodad/glow in between that curvy section and the arm/strut going back to the ship.
?:I agree with this one, maybe turn them inwards to the ship a bit, or don't make them stick out that far, they break the flow. Or then again, maybe not, since it follows the flow of the triangular section protecting the arm/strut.
Shading: totally not needed, seems to me like you allready did that, and the engine seems to be on the same height anyways.
Only thing you really have to do now is adding doodads/glows and weaponry, it seems finished to me.
EDIT: Engine flare should be coming from an engine, not constantly being there being all like, LOOK AT ME I'M GLOWING I'M GLOWING.
And preacher, now you've got me, a glow by shading, how the hell do you make something glow by shading it, I think you mean using fake aegis to make a section glow?
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Re: Another newb with ships
i think he means an engine flare or a glow by shading
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Re: Another newb with ships
The ship with the spikes and the Satelite Station thing Is awsome =D Nice work..