My second ship!

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My second ship!

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This is my second ship (not realy) my first ship was horrible.
I don't expect good criticism, I realy don't know much yet (omg i soud have just red the rules).
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You probably want to fill that hole.
Looks incomplete.
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Droid wrote:You probably want to fill that hole.
Looks incomplete.
Agreed, and the engine looks kinda weird.
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what a fascinating ship outline you've made now fill it in or make the holes into features ;)
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Okay i will fill it in today and i will remake the enginens.
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Here it is.
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There's still some holes in the ship, either fill them completely, or as Preacher said, incorperate them into the ship design, as in give them features that make them significant to the ship.

The pink glows are contrasting a bit too much as well, you might want to tone them down a bit
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Here it is again.
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I have made another ship, just a little thing i whiped up.
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Most of the grey sections are too bright, they contrast badly with the orange.

But I do like how you did the orange glows, keep them as they are
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I made another ship i hope you like it (i like to use purple glows very much).
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The shape is rather interesting, though the struts connecting the wings and main body seem too spindly.
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I have made yet another ship, I did not use many glows( or do i put more glow in to it ?).
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OKay i have recolord my ship and added an effect hope you like it !
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I'll bet that some people won't like how much purple you have used, but I actuall like it as it is. I also quite like how you're using the glows, it looks really nice. The body probaly needs some more work done on it, especially at the back, it's a bit bland there, but other than that, its fine

Looking forward to bigger and better things, really
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