Solare, Part III: THE MAULING ZONE (Page 2)

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Silver Swordsman wrote:*snip*

*bluhbluhdidnotdotheresearchevenslightly*
This is quite possibly the biggest and silliest turret I've ever seen. It's just excessive.

Also, at sea level, Mach 1 is 1,225km/h or so. The prototypes we have of RL railguns can fire a shot at 2,520m/sec - their expected/planned performance is 5,800m/sec. That's 9,000km/h and 20,880km/h respectively.

But no, instead you have to fire a slug that's a quarter to a half of the weight of a crewed, fuelled and prepared (but not loaded) Boeing 747.

Whilst we're on story and nonsensical things: Earthen? Really? I've heard some seriously cheesy names, but this just about takes the cake for lamest navy name ever.

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As for ships: Now that I think about it, you're building big. Too big. You don't seem to have much of a grasp of the smaller stuff. You use too many large, low-detail sections which compounds the problem of using too few sections overall. Go back to basics.
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Arcalane wrote:
Silver Swordsman wrote:*snip*

*bluhbluhdidnotdotheresearchevenslightly*
This is quite possibly the biggest and silliest turret I've ever seen. It's just excessive.

Also, at sea level, Mach 1 is 1,225km/h or so. The prototypes we have of RL railguns can fire a shot at 2,520m/sec - their expected/planned performance is 5,800m/sec. That's 9,000km/h and 20,880km/h respectively.

But no, instead you have to fire a slug that's a quarter to a half of the weight of a crewed, fuelled and prepared (but not loaded) Boeing 747.

Whilst we're on story and nonsensical things: Earthen? Really? I've heard some seriously cheesy names, but this just about takes the cake for lamest navy name ever.

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As for ships: Now that I think about it, you're building big. Too big. You don't seem to have much of a grasp of the smaller stuff. You use too many large, low-detail sections which compounds the problem of using too few sections overall. Go back to basics.

Thanks for the criticism. I went and changed the stats. Thanks for the tip.


I understand that my shipbuilding is lacking. I never said I was a hot shot. But then again, if you could be as kind as to point out where there are problems specifically instead of slapping down a "Your shipbuilding's awful, awful..." variant, I would very much appreciate the help.

(Yes, and I know that the cruiser has problems. I have already remodeled the transport a bit, and the cruiser's next.)
If admirals hate and trash your ships,
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I already did. Use of too many large and/or low detail sections. Use of too few sections overall. There's no flow, there's no detail, there's ugly breaks between sections, the colour-depthing on some of them is completely wrong, nonexistant or unnoticeable/jumps sharply from 'very light' to 'very dark'.
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Arcalane wrote:I already did. Use of too many large and/or low detail sections. Use of too few sections overall. There's no flow, there's no detail, there's ugly breaks between sections, the colour-depthing on some of them is completely wrong, nonexistant or unnoticeable/jumps sharply from 'very light' to 'very dark'.
Large Sections... check. Back to little Katie bombers... I guess
No Flow... check. Lurk... more?
Breaks... check. Connect them?
color-depthing... wait. I set contrasts on purpose so that some places would stand out, and to illustrate heights. Is that wrong?


By the way, what is the difference between my "cheesy" Reunified Earthen Navy (REN) and Starcraft's Unified Earth Directorate (UED)?
If admirals hate and trash your ships,
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Is that wrong?
You don't have just high and low on a ship. Unless they're all like an upside down T or whatever. You can use more than just two shades of grey for depth on monotone ships. I usually use up to five - three lighter tones (one of which is essentially white) for the main body, and one dark tone for the lowest part of the ship, and one dark tone for gunmetal/mechanical parts.

There're these fun things called gradients, you see.

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By the way, what is the difference...
The fact you took the word "Earth" and stuck "en" on the end. It sounds absolutely ridiculous.
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THE MAULING ZONE
Part I: The Guessing Game


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Sector 3, Neptune Airspace, Neptune Airspace Command.

72 hours after the breach of the Omega Line.

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Neptune Airspace Headquarters:: Internal

Emergency Conference
Official 1:- So you're telling me that an entire research community, a Refueling Dock, five Defense Platforms--
Official 2:- Two, sir. The Omega Line now only consisted of two Platforms. Their request for reinforcements was never approved.
Official 1:- Still, that does that in any way explain how a Refueling Dock, two defense platforms and ten research stations can go offline at any given time? Or how half of our local forces just disappeared?
- Silence
Official 2:- What are the chances of an internal short-circuit in the transmission beacon or the signal amplifier systems?
Technician:- The newer transmission beacons are designed with certain fail-safe triggers that would automatically warn the operator that there is a short circuit or wire-break, and everything is insulated against UV-ray interference. Therefore, the chances of the newer prototype failing are between 0.2 percent and 0.07 percent. As for the signal amplifiers, as there are exposed components, the possibilities of a breakdown are a bit higher...
Official 1:- Which is?
Technician:- Roughly 2 to 3 percent. EMP attacks are known to have permanently fried some of the delicate circuitry. Before they went offline DP-001 reported fuzzy readings due to a previous LSK assault in which it was hit by several EMPs before it had time to shut down its subsystems.
Official 1:- Still, that's not the issue. If an EMP attack had fried the Omega Line's transmitters, that should not in any way affect RR-D08 or SE_RF-007's ability to communicate. An NNEMP only has a range of several thousand meters, how can facilities two-hundred-fifty kilometers: away be affected?
Official 2: That's what we're trying to figure out.
Technician: Timidly Local interference?
Official 1: What?
Technician: Local interference. You know, like, gamma waves and such. Commonly emitted in energy-intensive environments like stars and... nuclear reactions. I'm no official, but it's a research facility. Who knows what they are doing in there? Maybe some experiment sent out a low-frequency EMP. That would have jammed communications for as long as the pulse is maintained.
Official 1: We already thought of that. It's a lot more serious than that.
Official 2: What do you mean?
Official 1: It's not just the research facility and the dock. We already sent another expeditionary force to investigate. Five destroyers. Kaiser William II, Dartmouth, Edomun, Tolkien, and Lewis and Clark. They should have been back hours ago.
Official 2: (Uneasily) EMP's don't stall thrusters, do they?
Technician: No, sir.

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Dispatcher: Sir! Sensors are picking up a distress beacon roughly 20 clicks away, near the asteroid clouds. It's the Lewis and Clark!
Official 1: Holy mother of mercy-- Organize relief and rescue operations now, over.

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(Frigate Arion pulls up alongside the battered remains of Lewis and Clark. Boarding Team Charlie-Bravo enters Lewis and Clark)

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BT-1: (Boarding party) Jesus... Everything's burnt out in here. Life reading negative.
BT-2: S***. Proceed to bridge anyways.
BT-3: (Boarding party) We're at the bridge... Holy-- (sounds of movement) ...the captain is alive... Get a medic NOW.
BT-1: Is he conscious?
BT-2: Affirmative. (Offline) Captain Andrews, are you alright?
Captain Andrews: cough cough I-I-I think I have a punctured lung.
BT-3: Who did this to you? BT-1, get a medic here ASAP!
BT-1: Affirmative, over.
Captain Andrews: It was... them.
BT-3: Who? The pirates?
Captain Andrews: No... ...they-they-they were green. Green people.
BT-4: Green? (laughs) You have got to be joking. Tell me, how big was the pirate fleet?
Captain Andrews: They were not pirates. Not unless they suddenly developed plasma and direct-energy weaponry and shield systems so advanced that even Enke shells couldn't get them. It was a one-sided firefight. The other ships were completely destroyed after firing their first salvo. I don't know how we got out.
BT-Medic: Medic coming through! Where's the captain?
Captain Andrews: ...We first went to the Research Facilities. All we found were debris fields. Then we headed for the Refueling Dock. That's when we saw Them...
BT-Medic: Stay with us, Captain. You're gravely injured. Just hang on, save your strength.


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(Two green streaks approach)
NAHQ: Lewis and Clark and Arion crews, alert! Comets inbound!
Captain Andrews: It's them... ...they've come.
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BT-1: I got a bad feeling about this... BRACE FOR IMPACT!
NAHQ: Arion, disengage immediately from Lewis and Clark!
BT-1,2,3,4,Medic: Ohhh-- s***...

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("Comets" impact head-on with Lewis and Clark)

Arion (Amber-class Frigate): Boarding parties, do you copy?

- (static)

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Nearby Patrol Craft: Neptune Airspace Command, this is Patrol Craft B638. Reporting unidentified target. (pause) It's definitely hostile. Under fire... Coordinates... 145... 294... 834... [END TRANSMISSION]
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NAHQ: Defensive Platforms DP-HQ1 and 2, open fire!

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(DP-HQ1 and DP-HQ2 open fire with twin Enke cannons. DP-HQ1 scores a glancing hit)

DP-HQ1: Boo-yah!
DP-HQ2: That was a scout, wasn't it?
DP-HQ1: That was definitely a scout.

NAHQ: Arion, get your men out of that hulk and report to HQ. Now.
Arion (Amber-class Frigate): Yes... sir. What about Captain Andrews?
NAHQ: Leave the fool.
Arion (Amber-class Frigate): I'm sorry, sir?
NAHQ: He is a traitor.
Arion (Amber-class Frigate): I beg your pardon, sir, but this man just--
NAHQ: This traitor, Captain Andrews, was intentionally allowed to escape by whatever freaks who did this to him so they could trail him back to Headquarters! Now Arion, would you kindly report back here? We shall need to mount a defense.
Arion (Amber-class Frigate): ...I'm afraid my engines are stalled. We're going to need a tow, sir.

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THE MAULING ZONE
Part II: The Calm Before the Storm


Some 12 hours later...

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Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer): Neptune Airspace Headquarters, this is Commodore Ostend. For the confrontation with this alleged "extraterrestial" threat, I have brought three destroyers and twelve Katies.
NAHQ: Thank you for the assistance. (Internal)
Official 2: (Urgent) Three destroyers and a dozen fighters will not be able to save Neptune from this enemy.
Official 1: We must do the best we can. Is the Arion repaired?
Official 2: Yes, sir.
Official 1: Tell her to pick up the civilians in the area and make haste back to Mars. She MUST notify the High Chancellor of this issue. Have her leave as soon as possible. Go.

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(The Arion leaves)

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Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): Did somebody ask for me help? Admiral Monroe, reporting.
NAHQ: Monroe! Thank God for some firepower and bulk. How many have you brought with you?
Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): Jest me, sirs.
NAHQ: Great. We were hoping for more.
Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): I brought ye sumthin' good.
NAHQ: And what's that, your lucky charm that failed you at Nyro?
Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): Nooo, nooo. Not that. Two beautiful gals that'll definitely charm the enemy.

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(Cruise Missiles, pretty ladies, indeed.)

NAHQ: It can't be. My eyes must be playing tricks on me.
Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): Yes, sirs! Newly obtained from Swordsman Enterprises. They willing to help destroy whoever destroyed their assets here.
NAHQ: Well, these will be quite handy.
Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): These missiles have a range farther than your Enke cannons or MAW-shots. This missile is to be detonated in the middle of their ranks, rather than on a single ship.
NAHQ: Let's just hope it does its job.
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Jewels of Diem (Vicki-class Transport): Jewels of Diem, code 7742, reporting.
NAHQ: Access denied, Jewels of Diem. Transports are not allowed here. This is currently a warzone.
Jewels of Diem (Vicki-class Transport): We acknowledge your situation and have come specifically for that purpose.
NAHQ: We?
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Star of Aven (Vicki-class Transport): Star of Aven, code 7741, reporting.
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Treasure of Riea (Viki-class Transport): Treasure of Riea, code 7740, reporting.
NAHQ: What's with this?
Jewels of Diem (Vicki-class Transport): We have brought you treasures that may turn the tide of the battle.
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Star of Aven (Vicki-class Transport): Energy disruptors. Otherwise known as industrial-grade EMP generators.
NAHQ: (Incredulous) EMPs? Are you mad? EMPs are the toys of pirate scum! We have no need for those. And where are your escorts? Transports never brave these areas alone.
Jewels of Diem (Vicki-class Transport): They went on a diversionary mission so that we could proceed with all due haste.
NAHQ:
(Internal)
Official 2: Sir, this just came in. That LSK assault on CHQ a few years back, remember?
Official 1: Yes, I remember that. Hacked into the Mainframe and messed things up. Bloody hell of a job to clean up, so I heard. It's been five years, we still haven't gotten to the bottom of that.
Official 2: Well, sir, these codes that these transports bring us... The 7700 series... We've discovered that these code entries were created exactly at the time of the hack.
Official 1: (pause) Are you certain?
Official 2: Well, we've also recently recovered beacons containing the codes 7783 and 7728 on a pair of captured Hunters.
Official 1: Christ. (Announces over broadcast system) All systems, target the three transports. I repeat, target the three transports. They are members of the traitorous League of Silent Knives! Open fire on my mark. Three...
Official 2: Sir, do not destroy them!
Official 1: Two... And why shouldn't I, colleague? One...
Official 2: For if you fire at them, then all is lost. If they blow an EMP where they are, they will incapacitate every ship here.
Official 1: (reluctantly, but resolute) Stand down! Stand down! I repeat, stand down and safety all weapon systems! To the Jewels of Diem, Star of Aven, and Treasure of Riea (Snarling) Why have you come?

Treasure of Riea (Viki-class Transport): We mean you no harm. You may have been our oppressors, but you are also our salvation, and we, yours.
Official 1: Blasphemy! The LSK have always been and always will be an enemy of the state!
Jewels of Diem: No. We know your enemy better than you do. Your nuclear-tipped shells are useless against their shielding systems. Their electrical equipment is sophisticated, but fragile. Our EMPs will incapacitate them, but we do not have the armor to withstand their firepower.
Official 1: What heresy are you conjuring, traitors?
Star of Aven: An alliance.
Official 1: NEVER! The power of the Navy and the Will of the Dominion is enough for victory.
Jewels of Diem (Vicki-class Transport): Do you not know your enemy? The enemy that confronts us both will offer neither leniency nor mercy. Their green fires burn to destroy us all, pirate and politician alike. There is no other objective, and in order to survive this murderous arson that eclipses all of our transgressions, we must unite!
Official 1: I will die a dozen deaths before I condescend to fight beside murderers, rapists, and robbers.
Star of Aven (Vicki-class Transport): Your absolutism alienates your allies. Is your cause so righteous? Are your ways completely blameless? You spare none in your conquests: at least we offer our captives a chance for redemption. You have ordered the unilateral destruction of solar fortresses and civilian centers alike. Your heart of stone sees no difference between a soldier and a woman with child!

Official 1: (disturbed)There is no mercy... only judgment for those who disobey. I... I... follow my orders.

Jewels of Diem (Vicki-class Transport): With a white-hot passion and hatred...

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Pilot 1 ("Katie" Scout Craft): Sir, the Star of Aven has some words scratched out on its hull. It says "Arms of Molly".
Official 1: (Suddenly pale) Are you certain?
Pilot 1: Affirmative, sir.
Official 1: (quietly, yet terribly) This... is why I have hated your kind so much. The Arms of Molly... that was my brother's ship. His name was John, I called him Jonnie. I loved my brother, I looked up to him... (voice cracks) Then one day... I got a letter... from the Navy... he was slain by pirates.



Star of Aven (Vicki-class Transport): (silence) Your brother, I knew him. He was not slain by us.
Official 1: ...what do you mean?
Star of Aven (Vicki-class Transport): You were fed by the propaganda machine of the Dominion. Your brother was never slain by pirates.
Official 1: They showed me pictures! Video clips!
Star of Aven (Vicki-class Transport): Lies. Your brother is alive. I know your Jonnie.
Official 1: Do not tempt me with empty words. If he is alive, then give me proof!
Star of Aven (Vicki-class Transport): (softly)You do not recognize my voice, do you... Sonny?
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Official 1: Jonnie...?
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THE MAULING ZONE
Part III: Pieces of a Broken World


Location: Somewhere in the Sol System, en route to Mars

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Arion (Amber-class Frigate): (Radar Operator) Da-da-dee-da-dum-dum-dee-da-dum-da-da-dee-da dumdum...
LSK Stalker 1: (Eerie whisper) Disturbia-a-a...
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LSK Stalker 2: Are you scared of us tonight...?
LSK Stalker 1: Disturbia-a-a...
LSK Stalker 2: You-a-goin down without a fight...
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LSK Stalker 1: Disturbia-a-a...
LSK Stalker 2: Disturbia-a-a...
LSK Stalker 1 and 2: Distur-ur-urbia... (snickers)
Arion (Amber-class Frigate): (Radar Operator) Let's see... these old songs are so boring... what's next on the playlist... Hello... Zepp...?
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Location: Ruins of Earth: In the events leading up the fall of the old government, the United Worlds of America, perhaps the greatest catalyst was the impact of the rogue planetoid, R-01, crashing into Earth at several hundred thousand kilometers per hour. While the government did facilitate evacuations, the massive loss of life and the subsequent economical crash led to massive revolts, splintering the solar system. Today, Earth is charred black, with the crust only beginning to solidify, the remains of R-01 protruding from the surface. As the old regime is rumored to have installed massive bunkers and safeties in seismically stable areas before the Fall, both the LSK and the Dominion have desired to find survivors, still sleeping after three millennia in their cyro-chambers, as well as finding any salvageable loot from the old world.

On the border between the surface of Earth and R-01

Dominion Officer: Watch your step now, rookie. This place is still dangerous.
Rookie soldier: I'll try my best, sir. Dangerous of what, sir?
Dominion Officer: Your best? Losers always whine about their best. Look more and talk less. Dangerous? Anything can happen here, kid. We've got pirates on the loose, hidden volcanoes, lava pits, earthquakes, and just about every kind of natural disaster. Just stay tight.

(Three men in ragged clothing suddenly appear, running)

Man 1: RUN, RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!
Man 2: RUN BEFORE THEY GET YOU!
Dominion Officer: Halt! I said halt! (To soldiers) Open fire!

(Two men are killed instantly. The third is shot through the leg and falls)

Dominion Officer: (Walks up close) You're a pirate, aren't ye, huh? (kicks him) Speak, scumbag!
Man 1: (wheezing) Get... away... now... before it's too late...

(Something pounces on one of the soldiers from behind)
Soldier: Ahhhhh, get it off, get it off! Ahhhhh...!
Soldier 2: Jesus, what is that!?!
Soldier 1: The hell I care! Just get it off! Get it off! It's biting me! Ahhhh...!
Dominion Officer: Move away, I'll do it--ugh-shluck!

(A spike protrudes from the officer's neck)


Soldier 3: I daresay, that this place is haunted! Run away like little girls!



Location: (Unknown)

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LSK "Cheeky" Zeke: Get back here, you donkey! Your glows and airs won't save you now! Your anti-sonovab**** machine can't even touch my crack now! What's that, did I make little jack@$$ cry? CRY SOME MORE!!! HAHAHAHAHA! Come here you little bugger. I just want to know you a bit more. Makes our friendship a bit less one-sided, don't ya think, eh?

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Systems Hacked. Scanning...
LSK "Cheeky" Zeke: Hahahahaha...! What you gonna do now, huh? Oh, I'm sorry... (Self-Destruct Sequence Terminated) We are going to have so much fun!
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THE MAULING ZONE
Part IV: Everyone's Stupid... Including You.



(Back at Neptune Airspace Headquarters...)

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NAHQ: Alright people, listen up. This is the plan...

(Several minutes later...)

NAHQ: Does anyone have any questions?
All: (Applause)
Scout Craft 1: Everyone, quiet. I have them on visual.

- (Silence)

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(Three large alien ships appear)

NAHQ: (Observing) They are staying just out of our cannon's range. (To Crew) Cameras, see if you can zoom in on what's going on.
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Jonnie (Experimental Prototype 1): They're launching some sort of small craft of sorts. They're moving forward... How on earth is that supposed to stay together?
NAHQ: (Horrified) It's not supposed to stay together... All turrets, fire at will!
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Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): Oh... Dear...!

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(Suicide Craft scores a direct hit on Admiral Monroe's bow)

Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): Blast! Front turret offline.
NAHQ: Why-oh-why did we not deploy trip mines?
Jonnie: We are.

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(Two LSK Hunters go on a daring mine-laying run amidst fire from both sides. Two more suicide craft make the charge but are destroyed by the charges)

NAHQ: How the hell did you get those two Hunters past our sensors?
Jonnie: Shhhhh. The pieces are moving.


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(The first ship passes over the first Disruptor complex)

Disruptor Operator: They think I'm a rock. (Snickers) So much for aliens... (Snickers)

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(One ship turns towards it)

Disruptor Operator: Oh.

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(Enemy ship gives the "rock" a hefty broadside.)
NAHQ: I swear I have never seen anyone more foolish. Targets in range! All turrets, FIRE!

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(Monroe's ship lets out an impressive salvo, but is completely blocked by the ships' overlapping shields.)

NAHQ: Jonnie, fire those EMPs! We need time to reload!
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Jonnie: We already lost one of the disruptors, so we're running at minimum capacity; if we are going to fry them, we are going to have to wait until they’re completely in range!
NAHQ: Great. Ostend, what are your Katies armed with?
Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer): Conventional loadout. Swarm rockets, a torpedo, and twin autocannons. (Sigh) Had I known it was going to be this bad I would have loaded them with MIRVs or something that was a bit heavier.
NAHQ: See if you can swing them around the back. Maybe the rear is less defended. Try to take out their engines.
Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer: Alright ladies, you heard the man. Let's hit that orbit, double-time!
Katie: Tell my mother I love her...
Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer): No. You tell her.

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(The twelve Katies begin their slingshot around Neptune.)

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(Enemy ships suddenly begin deploying fighters)

NAHQ: They're launching interceptors!
Commodore Ostend: S***! Those Katies will never make it like this! Katie Squad 24! Abort! Abort!
Admiral Monroe: They can't hear you. We've got no satellites to triangulate them.
NAHQ: All turrets reloaded! Salvo 2!

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(The Navy's palo-fusion missiles are simply useless against the alien ships' shielding)

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NAHQ: Fire the MAW!
Jonnie: Hold your fire!
NAHQ: And what for, Jonnie?
Jonnie: They're almost in range. If you fire now, you'll have nothing to hit them with when their shields are down.

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(Alien ships concentrate fire on Admiral Monroe's cruiser)

Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): Deary, deary me... Structure integrity fail!

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(The rear third of Monroe's ship breaks off and disintegrates)

NAHQ: (In disbelief) D-d-did their weapons just cut through all that Neptunian plating in three seconds?
Commodore Ostend: (dazed) I think so. (After a pause) We are so screwed.
Jonnie: Targets are in range... FRYING NOW!

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(A tremendous pulse is emitted by the twin disruptors... the alien ships's shield systems fail... in the form of an even larger pulse.)

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NAHQ: We're dead in the water!
Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer): Powering up all systems... time remaining... 90 seconds.
NAHQ: All weapon controls unresponsive!
Commodore Ostend: Eighty-five seconds. Rebooting drives.

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(Alien ships begin to glow again)

Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): They're already powering back up! Jesus, how could they? Command, the cruise missiles' circuitry is EMP-insulated. They should still be working, but we can't activate them!
Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer): Seventy seconds. Grid startup Initiation Sequence activated.
NAHQ: (muttering) I hate being a sitting duck. (To Monroe) You've got to hang in there until we're back online!

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(Alien beam begins to burn into Monroe's ship)

Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): I'm toast.
NAHQ: No, you aren't. Not yet.
Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): I'm not going to last much longer. Here are the codes for the missiles...
Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer): Fifty-three seconds remaining!
NAHQ: Hang in there, Monroe!
Admiral Monroe (Helena-class Cruiser): (Salutes) It's been a pleasure, sir--

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(Monroe's ship disappears into a giant fireball. All communications cease)

Commodore Ostend (Cynthia-class Destroyer): Thirty seconds. (Sigh) I'll never see her again...

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(Alien beams sweeps over the incapacitated destroyer, setting it ablaze)

Sonny: Who?
Commodore Ostend: Danae. My wife.
Sonny: You will. Hang on.
Jonnie: Fifteen seconds remaining.

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(Katie fighters suddenly emerges from the other side of the planet)

Katie: Take that, you punks!

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(Katies gives the aliens a taste of good, old-time schooling)

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(A derelict charge craft suddenly detonates, wiping out most of the Katies)

Commodore Ostend: I can't believe it.
NAHQ: All systems online... S***! My beacon's fried!
Katie: Commodore!
Ostend: Activate the cruise missiles! You're the only person who can do it!
Katie: Yes sir. Activating code three-zero-zero-alpha-three. For Ostend and eternity!

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(Missiles begin to accelerate)

Ostend: No. For Earth, Humanity… …and your mother.

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(Ostend's destroyer fireballs just as the missiles detonate between the three ships. Massive explosions rock the area as the massive plasma reactors go critical.)

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Katie: Victory! We have victory!
Sonny: (Quietly) At a price.
Jonnie: C'mon, commander! This is the first victory we have won against the Green Army. Cheer up for once, the fight's over.
Sonny: No. You have no idea... This battle for Neptune ends, but this war... this war for the Solar System, this war for our very survival... is just beginning...

Long-Distance-Transmission: Neptune Airspace Headquarters, this is Central Control. Establish contact with Admiral Monroe and Ostend and organize all troops in the vicinity and proceed with all due haste to Earth. That's an order.

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("Cheeky Zeke" appears from the right)

LSK "Cheeky Zeke": Mayday! Mayday! Mayday! I have a fleet of over twenty enemy ships on my six! Requesting immediate assistance, over!

Sonny: So it has begun.





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Alright while I think the ships are nifty its definately not what caught my eye. It's those freaking awesome weapon effects!
Please tell me how they were done (all of them preferably ^_^)
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Re: Solare ships

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Doogie12 wrote:Alright while I think the ships are nifty its definately not what caught my eye. It's those freaking awesome weapon effects!
Please tell me how they were done (all of them preferably ^_^)
Sorry, the ones that "really caught your eye" were created in GIMP. In fact, many of the pictures were touched up just to make them look a bit better. As for GIMP tech, I just played around with Dodge/Burn, Smear, and Sharpen/Blur.
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Then off you go, but don't call quits;
Just go make custom sprites.

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Arcalane wrote:
Silver Swordsman wrote:*snip*

*bluhbluhdidnotdotheresearchevenslightly*
*snip*
Complaining about a lack of realism while displaying a Warhammer 40k avatar strikes me as hilarious.

As per the ships themselves and the massive blocks of text and pictures to go with them: Eh, hit and miss. The basic ideas here are rather archetypal (aliens have curvy, glowy ships, humans have more industrial looking things) but the design style is at least fairly consistent for both sides. Some of the glows on the alien ships seem kinda random, being that some are confined and some are just leaking bloom out into space for no discernible reason. For instance

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Notice how the glow in the center is quite different from those of say the glow on those front pods there? Try to make them mesh a bit more. As per shape I'd say it works, though the bulging nose is a bit odd. For the humans I'd say that the larger ships become kind of cluttered and lose focus throughout. Large ships are more are often more difficult because they require thinking of the shape and construction of the whole thing. Ideally a large ship should have some sort of pleasing over all shape as well as details which draw your eye from one end of the ship to the other without ever getting stuck. My favorite was this one
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It's a nice, smooth design in which the whole does not detract from the details or vice versa.

The text and stories are a bit much. A sentence or a paragraph at most is good to describe a ship and with any luck the ship should really characterize itself simply by its design.
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Noctis wrote:
Arcalane wrote:
Silver Swordsman wrote:*snip*

*bluhbluhdidnotdotheresearchevenslightly*
*snip*
Complaining about a lack of realism while displaying a Warhammer 40k avatar strikes me as hilarious.
It's a space marine. With a top hat, a monocle, and a ridiculous moustache. I don't think that really counts.
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Arcalane wrote: It's a space marine. With a top hat, a monocle, and a ridiculous moustache. I don't think that really counts.
I know, I know, Its just that I read your post then looked at your avatar and giggled because of the juxtaposition. Like an astronomer dressed as sailor moon or something.
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