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My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 1:26 am
by lionm12
This is my second ship (not realy) my first ship was horrible.
I don't expect good criticism, I realy don't know much yet (omg i soud have just red the rules).

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 4:09 am
by Droid
You probably want to fill that hole.
Looks incomplete.

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 5:56 am
by James510
Droid wrote:You probably want to fill that hole.
Looks incomplete.
Agreed, and the engine looks kinda weird.

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 6:28 am
by Preacher
what a fascinating ship outline you've made now fill it in or make the holes into features ;)

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 12:20 pm
by lionm12
Okay i will fill it in today and i will remake the enginens.

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 12:53 pm
by lionm12
Here it is.

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 8:09 pm
by Imaillusion
There's still some holes in the ship, either fill them completely, or as Preacher said, incorperate them into the ship design, as in give them features that make them significant to the ship.

The pink glows are contrasting a bit too much as well, you might want to tone them down a bit

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 8:37 pm
by lionm12
Here it is again.

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 2:05 am
by lionm12
I have made another ship, just a little thing i whiped up.

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 8:26 pm
by Imaillusion
Most of the grey sections are too bright, they contrast badly with the orange.

But I do like how you did the orange glows, keep them as they are

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 10:00 pm
by lionm12
I made another ship i hope you like it (i like to use purple glows very much).

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 10:55 pm
by calvin1211
The shape is rather interesting, though the struts connecting the wings and main body seem too spindly.

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 11:56 pm
by lionm12
I have made yet another ship, I did not use many glows( or do i put more glow in to it ?).

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Thu May 20, 2010 3:14 am
by lionm12
OKay i have recolord my ship and added an effect hope you like it !

Re: My second ship!

Posted: Thu May 20, 2010 8:47 pm
by Imaillusion
I'll bet that some people won't like how much purple you have used, but I actuall like it as it is. I also quite like how you're using the glows, it looks really nice. The body probaly needs some more work done on it, especially at the back, it's a bit bland there, but other than that, its fine

Looking forward to bigger and better things, really