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 Post subject: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 1:26 am 
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This is my second ship (not realy) my first ship was horrible.
I don't expect good criticism, I realy don't know much yet (omg i soud have just red the rules).


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 4:09 am 
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You probably want to fill that hole.
Looks incomplete.


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 5:56 am 
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Droid wrote:
You probably want to fill that hole.
Looks incomplete.


Agreed, and the engine looks kinda weird.

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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 6:28 am 
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what a fascinating ship outline you've made now fill it in or make the holes into features ;)

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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 12:20 pm 
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Okay i will fill it in today and i will remake the enginens.


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 12:53 pm 
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Here it is.


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 8:09 pm 
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There's still some holes in the ship, either fill them completely, or as Preacher said, incorperate them into the ship design, as in give them features that make them significant to the ship.

The pink glows are contrasting a bit too much as well, you might want to tone them down a bit

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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Tue May 18, 2010 8:37 pm 
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Here it is again.


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Wed May 19, 2010 2:05 am 
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I have made another ship, just a little thing i whiped up.


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
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Most of the grey sections are too bright, they contrast badly with the orange.

But I do like how you did the orange glows, keep them as they are

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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Wed May 19, 2010 10:00 pm 
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I made another ship i hope you like it (i like to use purple glows very much).


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Wed May 19, 2010 10:55 pm 
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The shape is rather interesting, though the struts connecting the wings and main body seem too spindly.

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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Wed May 19, 2010 11:56 pm 
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I have made yet another ship, I did not use many glows( or do i put more glow in to it ?).


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Thu May 20, 2010 3:14 am 
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OKay i have recolord my ship and added an effect hope you like it !


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 Post subject: Re: My second ship!
PostPosted: Thu May 20, 2010 8:47 pm 
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I'll bet that some people won't like how much purple you have used, but I actuall like it as it is. I also quite like how you're using the glows, it looks really nice. The body probaly needs some more work done on it, especially at the back, it's a bit bland there, but other than that, its fine

Looking forward to bigger and better things, really

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