Old stuff and new stuff.

dgms17 · Post by **dgms17** » Mon Dec 14, 2009 9:04 pm

I've been around these forums for a while and someone told me to post my own ships. This isn't my first ship and it's certainly not perfect either.

Sorry about the zoom.

Any feedback is appreciated.

HamanoKinji · Post by **HamanoKinji** » Mon Dec 14, 2009 9:23 pm

I don't know if my comment could help but i think i'll give it a shot...
what i noticed first is that red thruster.. is it a thruster?

and i like your shading...

and I see things looks mechanical which caught my taste...

I don't know what clutter is so i don't think i can give you that comment...

but over-all... i liked it... just lessen the redness of the thruster... it catches attention...

well for me...

that's that... and i admit.. you're better than me...

Kiltric · Post by **Kiltric** » Tue Dec 15, 2009 12:25 am

It feels very cluttered around the middle, the curved, detailed sections you used don't mesh well with the smooth style of the rest of the ship.

The outline is okay, but some of the sections you used on the outside just look ugly.

On the whole, the internals of the ship are good, but, save for the front, when you work on the outside everything just gets sloppy.

It just needs refinement is all.

dgms17 · Post by **dgms17** » Wed Dec 16, 2009 2:32 am

Updated design:

The two 'boosters' are actually beams.
There are some holes in the middle, but that will be fixed.
The nanomatrix reset and I can't change the sprite anymore.

Any other feedback?

Kiltric · Post by **Kiltric** » Wed Dec 16, 2009 4:32 am

It looks good, definitely an improvement. However, the pieces on the sides still look odd. It's not huge, but it's the difference between good and great.

dgms17 · Post by **dgms17** » Thu Dec 17, 2009 3:03 pm

Kiltric wrote:the pieces on the sides still look odd.

Which pieces, to be exact?
Update:

Like this?

Kiltric · Post by **Kiltric** » Fri Dec 18, 2009 4:51 am

the Kae_aln-sw14, and Kae_dtl-sw11

dgms17 · Post by **dgms17** » Sat Dec 19, 2009 5:59 pm

Is it better like this, or should I just remove the sections?

hazelwooder · Post by **hazelwooder** » Sat Dec 19, 2009 7:34 pm

looks better i would suggest the sections you have made darker move change the depth so they are below the ligher sections around them.

i think you should build on the side pods make them out of several sections, they look abit out of proportion with the rest of the ship at the moment.

dgms17 · Post by **dgms17** » Sat Dec 19, 2009 11:20 pm

hazelwooder wrote:looks better i would suggest the sections you have made darker move change the depth so they are below the ligher sections around them.

Which sections to be exact? I thought I removed those errors.

hazelwooder wrote:I think you should build on the side pods make them out of several sections, they look abit out of proportion with the rest of the ship at the moment.

A friend commented that I should completely remove those side pods, but I like your suggestion more.

hazelwooder · Post by **hazelwooder** » Sun Dec 20, 2009 12:56 am

dgms17 wrote: Which sections to be exact? I thought I removed those errors.

kae_gnr_sw29, center-rear of the ship

dgms17 wrote:A friend commented that I should completely remove those side pods, but I like your suggestion more.

try both ideas.

god froggy · Post by **god froggy** » Sun Dec 20, 2009 1:22 am

yeah those pods on the side do look a little strange, try making them further from the ship and longer.

Kazutek · Post by **Kazutek** » Sun Dec 20, 2009 4:21 am

kinda looks like a turkey to me

sorry.

...mmm... turkey sanvich...

Kiltric · Post by **Kiltric** » Sun Dec 20, 2009 5:30 am

dgms17 wrote:
Is it better like this, or should I just remove the sections?

It's better but still a bit odd.

Perhaps you should remove the sections and build bigger sidepods out of the space, as someone else suggested.

god froggy · Post by **god froggy** » Sun Dec 20, 2009 6:43 am

also you might want to give the nose more depth, and those side bits are still a bit weird.