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The Order of the New Dawn

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 1:29 am
by Grasmaaier
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After the devastation of the third World War, humanity crumbles from the ashes and is once again reaching for the stars, space travel is possible and travel to some nearby systems is possible using a new drive technology that pushes a ship deeply trough deep space, disabling the ship in deep space, but gets back to functionality once in a new system.

Two political forces, the United Nations of Mankind (UNM) and the Order of the New Dawn lead colonization on new worlds, military conflicts have been banned from the solar system, the war must be fought on the outer areas.
The new lines are drawn, war is once again a common thing between the two large forces.
The UNM expands quickly with their fast tactics and quick thinking, kinetic and missile weapons in their arsenal, they must fight the Order.

June 2nd 2405,
A mysterious and unknown artifact has been found in the territories of the Order, the Order believes in a new way of life, a new dawn that was promised long ago by another race, with eternal peace. The Order uses the technology of a ancient long dead civilization, powerful particle bolt and beam weapons have been invented and are in the arsenal of this powerful force.


The large war will be on a far larger scale than the world wars, far larger, this war will take entire systems. It's a fight over resources, treaties and to be the ultimate power ever known to humanity.

Order ship arsenal.
Mantis class very heavy corvette
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Almost frigate sized, this corvette is a large scale bomber using two capital grade particle blasters, firing bolts like a torpedo, this is a dangerous bomber-corvette to any capital ship, the blasters can only fire forward, thus making it a large bomber.

Sphinx class destroyer

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The Sphinx is not all too big, expensive but reasonably armored and is ready to take multiple tasks, using 4 particle blasters as turreted weapons, the Sphinx can easily defend itself or escort larger vessels.
It is rumored that a Sphinx class destroyer carries one infantry drop pod to board disabled vessels or quickly insert a special ops team into a planet.

Cobra class light cruiser
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This state of the art cruiser is a dangerous one, although a light cruiser, easily destroyed by large capital vessels, it carries a heavy cruiser grade particle beam emitter instead of a large amount of smaller weapons. The Cobra is a ideal escort and a sole destroyer flotilla leader alike.

Python class heavy cruiser.
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The python is considered a heavy cruiser, yet it is not really that big but the Python earned it's name by its design. Like a real Python, this ship has 1 turreted particle beam and 4 fixed particle beams mounted in the wings, it can rattle around its target and give a deadly strike.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 1:57 am
by SHAD0Wdump
Who here has gotten sick of the 'oh wow... I fail,here's a ship that honestly I don't think fails but I'm saying it because it gets people to drool on my stuff or so I think' meme?

The ship is fine,omega's ships were fine,TSA started the whole bloody mess!

Seriously,some of the crap that goes on in this forum,from memes,to downright unnecessary(and unprofessional in certain cases) moderation,to talk of dicks and cock in every corner.


Alright,I'm done ranting.


I like the ship,it is somewhat monochrome with it's blue hue in my opinion,yes you have the yellow bits and the pink glows to offset that,but I'd imagine a little more would make it better.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 2:19 am
by Grasmaaier
Alright, added some more yellow and doodads!
I hope I did well :oops:

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 2:32 am
by SHAD0Wdump
Much better.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 6:37 am
by praetors
in my opinion the colouring are very good, the desding good, continue making! :wink: :lol:

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 6:51 am
by Anna
SHAD0Wdump wrote:to downright unnecessary(and unprofessional in certain cases) moderation,to talk of dicks and cock in every corner.
If I catch you bitching about this one more time, you whiny little fuck, I swear to Christ you'll find out what unnecessary and unprofessional moderation really looks like. It's not your place to decide how shit should be moderated here, and if you don't like it, leave.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 7:36 am
by Noctis
Anna wrote:
SHAD0Wdump wrote:to downright unnecessary(and unprofessional in certain cases) moderation,to talk of dicks and cock in every corner.
If I catch you bitching about this one more time, you whiny little fuck, I swear to Christ you'll find out what unnecessary and unprofessional moderation really looks like. It's not your place to decide how shit should be moderated here, and if you don't like it, leave.
So, I'm curious, are we allowed to critisize the mods? I've been to forums where even questioning the mods is grounds for banning (though they were extremist christian forums).

I see nothing wrong with the mods insofar, not exactly the nicest of people half the time, but usually fair. Anna is a complete ass with all the subtlety and smoothness of flaming sandpaper ; but that doesn't stop him from being right.

If we're not allowed to be critical just replace that last bit with something pithy like "I'm a giant faggot" or "Frog legs from denmark" or somthing.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 7:58 am
by Anna
Noctis wrote:So, I'm curious, are we allowed to critisize the mods? I've been to forums where even questioning the mods is grounds for banning (though they were extremist christian forums).

I see nothing wrong with the mods insofar, not exactly the nicest of people half the time, but usually fair. Anna is a complete ass with all the subtlety and smoothness of flaming sandpaper ; but that doesn't stop him from being right.

If we're not allowed to be critical just replace that last bit with something pithy like "I'm a giant faggot" or "Frog legs from denmark" or somthing.
Hah. No, plenty of people have criticised me in the past and usually the worst that happens is that I criticise them right back. And I'll have you know that I'm plenty capable of subtlety, I just stopped bothering with it once I realised the average person on this forum couldn't pick up on it. :P

Anyway, apologies for the derail, Grasmaaier. Blame SHADOWdump if you want to blame anyone. If you want me to split this stuff out of your thread, just lemme know.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 8:43 am
by 25000st
I love the colors and lights. They engine look a bit awkward though.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 4:21 pm
by Grasmaaier
Oh no, its fine, but a split would be ok.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 5:55 pm
by Grasmaaier
Sorry for double post, but I went further! :D
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Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 6:28 pm
by Anna
The colours seem a bit too extreme. I'd recommend toning them down slightly, and perhaps throwing in some neutral shades like greys and whites. Not blacks though, not unless it's more of a dark grey than a black. Other than that, you seem pretty solid.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 7:07 pm
by Lizzie
The colors are a bit extreme. I'd also suggest some lighter shades of blue in addition to the grey.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 7:38 pm
by MagusZero
Or make it purple and grey. It makes me think of megatron already. Doesn't look THAT much like him, but still reminds me of him.

Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 9:31 pm
by Wicky_42
Nothing wrong with a bit of colour. Just a bit different to the standard 'grey with coloured bits' theme this forum likes so much. Maybe 'colour with grey bits' would work...