Wyrdysm Games

This is my first ship, that i'm posting and i was kinda looking for some constructive criticism, what i did right and what i did wrong and so forth...

it has wings/feathers that expand and retract like a fan so theres 2 links, one for wings feather things out, one for them in. Any ways here it is:




comments?

First rule: Don't EVER use plain white fake aegis. Avoid even if you change its color.

Your weapons look a bit spammed. Conceal some under your sections. Your feathers look too flimsy compared to the rest of the ship. They look like they would snap right off. Your sections usage isn't horrible but could use some work. You may want to put another color in the shape, preferably gray.

thanks
my aegis is actually a light blue, but when they stack it turns white.. im working on a solution to that

grey for a second color? good idea thanks

Concealing weapons means doing this.

Part of my missile platform.

I've already concealed the front autocannons but thanks
what else do you think should be concealed? i thought there weren't really enough weapons to need that but I'm the newbie here
keep it coming guys! you have no idea how helpful this is

Hmmm... Replace the sabots with Rockets on the side of the section it's on.

hmmmm... looks wise rockets or torpedoes would look far better... sabots are ugly as sin but i kinda want to keep the penetrating capability that the sabots have...
any way to compromise on this one? maybe give the penetrating power of a sabot to another weapon?

again thanks

You can keep the sabot gun but change the sprite of it into a rocket. You could also change the deflectors to a light blue to camo them. I would recommend placing the point beams on the tip of the wings and deleting the beamers.

Another thing. Don't stretch Sections. they make them look ugly.
Can you give me your ship maker file of the ship? I'll turn it to my version.

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sorry for how large these are :S




better? worse? advice?
keep it coming...

There's a big blue blob in the middle of your ship that sticks out like a very cold thumb. Try layering over/swapping out that square with something that looks like it's part of a three dimensional ship, and not a two dimensional pile of sprites.

you're totally right... its a different color i'm not sure how i missed that, or how it even happened in the first place
strange x 10000000

Can you give me your Ship Maker file of the ship?
Maybe i can plan it out a little more.

yeah sure:
http://filesmelt.com/Filehosting2/downl ... lution.sb4
enjoy

Are you using latest version?
Cause i'm using latest.
It says that i can't load it.
it says

___________________________________________
ERROR in
action number 1
of Key Release Event for <Enter> Key
for object gui_efield:

Cannot load game saved with other version.