Wyrdysm Games

This is their battleship the Bijen Battleship

Edit: change the support beams for the cannons



Please I need feed back tell me what you think
I'm trying to get good at it.

CREDITS to Arcalane for his Turrets

I wonder why some people get 'their' confused with 'there'.

Anyways... the colour scheme still clashes. Your red is far too dark compared to the yellow on the back, and why are there turrets on small supports like that? I doubt the supports would be able to hold the turrets very securely.

Try using custom colours instead of your usual colour scheme, it can help far more. Using custom colours also lets you use more than just 3 colours.

Then again, I'm pretty much just an amateur. Maybe you should let guys like Anna or Arcalene do the criticizing. >.>

you are right changing it now

I personally think the rear gun would look better if it was flipped horizontally. Just my opinion though.

Come to think of it... yeah. Rear turret would look better pointing backwards.

And I suggest you scrap the turret support entirely and put it on the ship itself. No decent shipbuilder would put turrets like that out on supports like that. Same goes for the dual laser turrets on the front.

Your colour scheme needs to be changed before more people get their eyes assaulted... (I think)

Try scrapping the yellow sections on the rear entirely - they look like they don't belong to the ship.

Rather than scrapping the side turrets, you could just bulk them up into capitol ship side sponsons - much more fun

It would look better if you layered the colors better. at first it looks like it's layered red > grey > yellow, but some of the grey parts overlap the red. It really ruins the illusion of depth.

Edit: Having looked at it again, I agree with the people who say the rear main turret should be flipped to face backwards. have them all set to 90 degree arc ranges (or maybe slightly more, 95 or 100 since they're relatively far apart.) and you can have a great broadsider, with a WWII era battleship feel to it.

I've gone over it as you can see in the Screenshot



I've rot the back turret 180 dergees facing back.
fix the layer. What should I change the colors to, but yellow stay on it no matter what. More feedback please

To be honest, the ship would still look better without the yellow sections on the rear...

The lower cannon on the rear turret is slightly off. Might wanna fix that.

If you are going to use yellow, perhaps not just have it at the rear - add some yellow to the front somehow?

The dual turrets hanging out on the sides of the ship look silly - aesthetically and practically. The turrets would simply get blown off easily, because they are large, and easy targets.

The problem with the rear turret fix. look at the Screenshot


I've change all the arcs on the three barrels turrets to 100

In my opinion, the ship look worse witout the turrets on the side. don't ask me why. Also, change the yellow on the back and the back 2/3 of the ship to a darker grey to improve the colouring.

Looks much better, but you need to either get rid of the yellow rear engines or change the dark red to something else.

I think IBurn is at least partially right, in my humble opinion. The latest version looks to me like it's practically begging for sidecandy in some shape/form/scale.

Maybe missile batteries instead of twin-turrets?