Battleship post

Warrior of Anarchy · Post by **Warrior of Anarchy** » Thu Nov 06, 2008 10:38 am

Sorry I havent posted in a while. Heres my newest work. please comment[img][img]http://i431.photobucket.com/albums/qq35 ... reen06.jpg[/img]
[/img]

Caesius · Post by **Caesius** » Thu Nov 06, 2008 11:58 am

Section 16 and Aegis spam is ugly and asymmetric.

Never have the little rectangle things sticking out of Section 10 visible.

The insides only seem to be a mild jumble of parts; you may want to construct your hull in stages instead of throwing things on there. It doesn't work so well; I'd know.

The colors are a bit too dark; go for more contrast.

Lloyd16 · Post by **Lloyd16** » Thu Nov 06, 2008 3:37 pm

The ship looks like you made it by randomly throwing sections down.
looks a bit like a soup ship.

flabort · Post by **flabort** » Fri Nov 07, 2008 12:42 am

i have a brother... his ships belong in the trash.

yours... are just as bad.

Ok, that's a bit harsh, i realize. so, to soften it up, i will say this:

atleast you don't have floating sections, and think a "fleet" is 5 ships in the same file, which means if the first ship is destroyed, all of them are destroyed.

however, you need to find a balance between section spam and section reppitition.

i see lots of spam, very little repitition.

also, i hate to say this, but the agies... no. just... no.

to say more, it does look like soup. with so many seasonings, it tastes terrible.

let up on the salt and pepper.

Lizzie · Post by **Lizzie** » Fri Nov 07, 2008 8:12 am

Flabort, you fail. That ship is actually really decent. My issues lie in the aegis and colors though. The section use seems ok to me though.

Kanosint · Post by **Kanosint** » Fri Nov 07, 2008 9:05 am

The ship is awfully bland, but... I do like the effect you generated... The sections are all wrong, but you made the Aegis look like a cylinder of sorts...

jwa8402 · Post by **jwa8402** » Fri Nov 07, 2008 10:08 am

I definitly like the shape. Its not so much the section use that botheres me, just that they seem sloppily arranged...A little work on the layering and adjustment, and it would be an awesome looking ship. Also I would try aegising a piece inside the 16s, not them.

ianfreddie07 · Post by **ianfreddie07** » Fri Nov 07, 2008 6:32 pm

This is a pretty decent ship. Section use is pretty ok and varied, if not a bit too much and a bit cluttered. Color could be better, and change the aegised section 16s. Otherwise I like it.

Ingens Remus · Post by **Ingens Remus** » Wed Nov 19, 2008 6:24 am

Also: your placement of the section 26s is quite good. It is difficult to put those into a position where they look good.

Skull13 · Post by **Skull13** » Wed Nov 19, 2008 7:29 am

The aegis burns my eyes.
But other than that, its...good? I can't see it very well. Try using Notdark whatever.

/me hands WoA a Notdark whatever colored pencil.

Draw.

Shogoll · Post by **Shogoll** » Wed Nov 19, 2008 3:48 pm

It's a nice outline, but a terrible piecejumble on the inside. Colors are kind of shitty too. Also terrible aegis color, and try to not use Paint for Jpeg creation, it makes your ships look a LOT more terrible.