Ships (Now with excuse) C&C please

Crimsonflame · Post by **Crimsonflame** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 8:11 pm

Not the most creative title i must admit but it gets the job done.

Vendetta (Removed grid)

Vagrant(credits to Blackhart for his kickass sprites)

All comments are accepted.

ArcaneDude · Post by **ArcaneDude** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 8:22 pm

This is quite interesting. It's not like anything I've ever seen before from a newbie shipbuilder. The outlining is a bit too gratuitious, and it's color doesn't really fit with the rest of the ship. Some of the squary angled sections you've used don't add too well either. Overall colorwork and section usage is accepteable, except for aforementioned instances. The general shape looks okay, but I'd make the back of the winglets less straight.

LordGarcia · Post by **LordGarcia** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 8:27 pm

wow that actually is a pretty interesting ship. especially for firstposters. do you have those "energy lines" fading in and out? that possibly would look pretty badass. oh and it also looks like it could transform in some way.

Crimsonflame · Post by **Crimsonflame** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 8:45 pm

Well i just made the wings curve backwards a bit and I am currently looking into the squary angled bits. The outlining is supposed to show how the energy from the "generator" gets to the rest of the ship but i guess i did overdo it a little but thats gonna take awhile to fix.

Unfortunately i don't have the skill or the know how to make it transform or glow. I did try to make something with moving bits earlier but i ended up with a jumbled piece of crap so i'm trying to make normal good looking ships before moving on to moving sections.

MelvinVm · Post by **MelvinVm** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 8:48 pm

Pretty good, i like the blue colors, but i don't like the red
Now some nice internal work and it would amaze me

Crimsonflame · Post by **Crimsonflame** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 9:17 pm

Internal work as in moving sections? I'll try changing the red to something that blends better with blue.

ArcaneDude · Post by **ArcaneDude** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 9:26 pm

With internal work he probably means how the guts of your ship are constructed. The section usage.

Crimsonflame · Post by **Crimsonflame** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 10:05 pm

First post edited with updated version tell me what you think . 10 pm where i live , gonna go get some shut eye.

MelvinVm · Post by **MelvinVm** » Wed Mar 04, 2009 10:06 pm

Internal work shows how the ship is made from the inside, a core type of thing, details.
It quite makes a texture for the ship, showing the details.
A ship is not build from just random sections with the right shape.
And oh, don't replace pics, keep the old one, so we can compare stuff.

DoomBringer · Post by **DoomBringer** » Thu Mar 05, 2009 5:30 pm

Change the black to something else that fits better with blue, purple? maybe?
Nice ship however my first ship was not as good.

Any guns soon?

Crimsonflame · Post by **Crimsonflame** » Thu Mar 05, 2009 6:59 pm

I don't know i really like the grey and the ship is already fully armed.

Krishach · Post by **Krishach** » Thu Mar 05, 2009 11:29 pm

The light cyan outlines that appear throughout the ship seem like they have no purpose. If it was a brief lighting before a weapon fire, transformation, etc, but if they are there all the time, they ruin the lines of a good ship. Makes it seem like a bunch of puzzle pieces with clear outlines rather than a smooth whole.

Slayer0019 · Post by **Slayer0019** » Fri Mar 06, 2009 4:21 am

I believe he said they were meant to represent power flow.

If this is the case, there seem to be an awful lot of power lines toward the front armor and less near the engines and weaponry.

Crimsonflame · Post by **Crimsonflame** » Fri Mar 06, 2009 7:07 am

The front has many power lines because that is where the main gun is located. I toned down the rest of the outlining a bit and changed the wings so they can better protect the main body, i also added a core like thing as suggested.

parameciumkid · Post by **parameciumkid** » Fri Mar 06, 2009 7:08 am

Assuming the wing sections are all parented to those glowing blue orbs, you could just make the orbs rotate with a border of about 90 degrees or so and have opening & closing wings.